Entry #7

Paragraph one: (my version)

In my country there are many places to visit on holidays, in the four seasons and for all kinds of interests.  For those interested in mountainous sceneries, the south is really beautiful and it offers a lot of entertainment, especially in winter season. For those people who want to lie in sunlight on the beach we offer the Atlantic Coast, in summer time. Moreover, for those people who love the river and quiet places to relax, and why not fishing, we recommend visiting our beautiful province of Entre Rios. Finally, for those people interested in the history of the country, the capital of Buenos Aires is full of magic places that are worth to be known. Argentina offers a wide variety of places to visit at any time of the year for recreational enjoyment.

Paragraph two: (my mate’s version)

In Argentina, there are plenty of different landscapes people can visit and enjoy. For those interested in mountainous sceneries, the south is really beautiful and it offers a lot of entertainment, especially in winter season. For those people who want to lie in sunlight on the beach we offer the Atlantic Coast, in summer time. Moreover, for those people who love the river and quiet places to relax, and why not fishing, we recommend visiting our beautiful province of Entre Rios. Finally, for those people interested in the history of the country, the capital of Buenos Aires is full of magic places that are worth to be known. Argentina has beautiful landscapes and interesting places to choose and visit on holidays time.

Metacognitive analysis:

Analyzing both paragraphs, I notice that the overall meaning does not vary at all. Anyway, in my version the topic sentence is better because it specifies what the paragraph is going to be about. On the other hand, my mate’s topic sentence does not reflect exactly what the paragraph says but it a has a global view. The election of synonyms are quite good but, maybe, we could avoid some meaningless repetition. Finally, in my topic and conclusion sentences i could include most of the elements mentioned throughout the paragraph, but in my mate’s version that is fairly incomplete.